同学们在学习托福独立写作的时候，是不是经常为写不到理想的字数而发愁呢？这时候各路高手大牛会和大家说，“把主体段的例子写详细啊！”可是如何把例子写详细充实呢？

我们先来看一个具体的例子吧！

比如说在16年10月22日的考试中，独立写作的考题是：

Some believe that young people should do various activities while others believe that they should focus on one activity that is important to them. Which one do you think is better and why? 

如果我们的分论点之一是参加多种活动使得我们结识很多朋友，有的同学可能写出如下的一个例子： 

例A：Taking part in various activities makes it possible for people to make friends. For example, I attended a basketball club last summer and I made many friends in the club. Because we all liked basketball, we became good friends in the club. 

这个例子是不是缺少细节又字数不理想呢。那我们怎么样充实这个事例才能既充实这个事例增加字数，又给文章增色呢？

我们可以这样来写：

改写：Taking part in various activities makes it possible for people to make friends. For example, I attended a basketball club last summer and I met many interesting people who shared the same interests with me. At first, I was very shy in the club, being afraid to talk with others. Later, as we started to play basketball together in a team, I quickly developed a strong friendship with my teammates because we were all passionate about basketball. During training, we worked as a team.After training, we talked about other interesting topics a lot. I was so happy that I attended the club and met so many wonderful friends. As a result, this example clearly indicates that people have opportunities to make friends when they participate in various activities.

这个例子相比上一个，就比较充实，很明白的表达出了一个事情（参加篮球俱乐部认识朋友）。那我们现在来看看应该如何扩充一个例子吧。

1、时间的表达

文段中的时间状语有：last summer, at first, later， during training, after training。其中我们看 at first 和 later 可以明白，这个例子讲了一个过程，首先如何，之后怎么样。如果我们写出了一个过程，而不是单一的一个动作，例子自然就详细很多。

大家再来找一下，这个例子里有关人物心理活动的表达。

2、有关人物心理活动的表达

文段中的 very shy,being afraid to, I was so happy。我们在写作的时候不光写发生的具体事件，同时也要用小学时语文课学的“夹叙夹议”的手法，写写人物的心理感受，这样可以也增加细节。

3、总结句

大家请看看例子的最后一句话，As a result, this example clearly indicates that people have opportunities to make friends when they participate in various activities.

这句话作为我们整个例子的总结句，这使得咱们的例子更加扣紧主题增强文章严谨性，同时也帮大家的写作增加了字数。

最后总结一下，我们可以用一张图表示一个比较详细的例子：